Atha: Diplomat is a dream job

DIPLOMAT IS A DREAM JOB

What is DIPLOMAT ? Diplomat are people who served as mediators {intermediaries} and then i want to tell What is Dream job ? Dream job is the things of future goals But,Dream job is the favorite future goals. Why I said that this is favorite? Because when you be a diplomat you can go to all countries in the world and it’s FREELY. What is the example: if your countries gift (give) you duty to be diplomat in Korea you can go there at a cost by our countries. So diplomats will pay (will be paid) for transportation, living expenses during our stay in that countries  and the cost of our children’s education or our family.  Diplomat’s main duty is to maintain world peace. Now let’s  just go to my argument.

I agree that diplomats are a dream job because in addition to having the noble task of maintaining world peace, this work is also beneficial to us as well, an example can go to all countries in the world for free and familiar with various cultures in the world.

What’s my proof: So there’s my mother friend who had a job and his job is diplomat so it’s why I say at the first paragraph that diplomat is the same things like a dream job. (Explain what’s the good things about becoming a diplomat, from your mum’s friend).

Some of this information I found from www.quora.com said that diplomat can be a job for you sometime and from www.sallary.com she said diplomat is important for our daily life.

My Conclusion is, although not easy to be a diplomat, but i still think that diplomat is Dream job.

Teacher’s note:

1.    Conclusion is in the last paragraph, so I change the order of your paragraphs.

2.    You don’t need to write first, second or third paragraph. Just write like what I post.

3.    Explain more why